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i'm fine, really i am.  i'm not upset.  i'm just tired.  i'll be fine.  don't worry about me.  i'm ok.  i'll be alright.  i'm not angry with you.  don't be upset.  everything is fine.  everything is good.  everything is perfect.  nothing's wrong.  really, nothing's wrong, ok?  i just feel a little sick.  i shouldn't have had so much to eat.  i'll be fine in a minute.  i'm ok.  don't worry.  smile.  no, i'm not crying.  there's something in my eye.  just nevermind.  look at me.  look at me.  see?  what? oh, yeah, i'm fine.  i was just joking.  really, i'm just tired, kay? nothing is wrong.  life is great.  i love it.  i love it.  i love you.  oops, ha ha, just joking again.  that would be too weird, wouldn't it?  yeah.  but i love you as a friend.  forever and always.  i told you - there's something in my eye.  i'm fine.  i'm ok.  absolutely nothing's wrong.  i'm just tired.  i'm not upset.  stop asking that.  i already told you i'm fine.  let it go.  drop it, ok?  no.  i'm not going to tell you anything - there's nothing to tell.  i'm fine.  everything is perfect.  i'm not upset.  nothing's bothering me, got it?  leave me alone.  i'm fine.  nothing's wrong.

yes, am i feeling better, thank you.  still a little out of it though.  sorry, what was that?  i wasn't paying attention.  yeah, i'm fine.  i'm great.  what about you? i'm not changing the subject.  i'm being polite.  you know - manners.  it's rude to press.  i told you i'm fine, i'm not changing the subject - you are. what's wrong? are you sure it's nothing? hah, ok.  i couldn't sleep last night either.  have some coffee.  it might help.  it does.  that's good.  no, i still feel tired.  i guess caffeine isn't a substitute for sleep after all.  no, i do go to bed at a reasonable time.  i just can't fall asleep.  no idea.  i thought we were finished with that.  i'm fine.  nothing's wrong.  just drink your coffee and shut up.  leave me alone.  i am telling you the truth.  don't you trust me? you don't.  you don't.  it doesn't matter what you say.  you just refuse to listen.  why should i talk to you?  you think i'm a liar. i'm fine.  stop asking.  just shut up and leave me alone now.  i answered all your questions.  that's what you wanted, isn't it? now stop. yes i did.  i told you the truth.  the whole truth.  nothing left out at all.

stop it.  i'm fine.  you don't have to interrogate me.  i feel fine, really, i do.  there's no reason to worry.  you're not helping.  i don't need help.  i don't want help.  nothing's wrong.  shut up.  i'm not myself?  will you just drop it?  it's nothing.  i'll be fine.  i'm just tired.  what are you talking about? i'm not making excuses.  i'm trying to explain.  why don't you ever listen?  stop over reacting.  i'm sorry.  i'm not mad at you.  but really, it's nothing.  i'm fine.  nothing's wrong.  stop asking, ok.  just leave me alone.  i don't need any help.  i'm ok.  can you just let this go? do you need to make an argument out of everything? leave me alone!  shut up.  i'm happy.  i'm content.  nothing's wrong.  nothing is at all out of place.  just try to ease up.  let it go.  it's not important.  it's nothing.  let's talk about something else, please.  anything else.  i don't care.  i am fine.

i told you - i don't want to have this conversation again.  will you just drop it?  i'm fine!  now stop it!  i mean it.  it don't want to discuss this any more.  i am absolutely fine.  nothing's wrong!  shut up! i am not listening to any more of this.  get out.  i mean it.  now.  no.  i don't want to hear it.  i mean what i say.  obviously you don't understand that.  are you crying?  oh my god.  i'm sorry.  i'm just so frustrated.  i feel like you don't believe a word i say.  that would frustrate you, too, wouldn't it?  i didn't want to make you so upset.  i'm sorry.  i'm really am.  please, just stop crying.  thank you.  but i still think you need to trust me.  you'll try? try? i guess i can live with that.  for now.  want some coffee?  i'll make a fresh pot.  i could use a cup of it, myself.  no, still not sleeping well.  what?  don't look at me like that.  like there's some deeper meaning in everything i say.  there isn't.  get over it and move on.  i'm sick of being treated like this.
If you faved this and it's gone, please read before asking why. [link]


Here's the text from the first four layers of Nothing's Wrong. [link] Personally I think it's better not reading any of this, so I'm not going to share how it ends. I think it's pretty clear if you take a minute.

As you can see, it's a grammatical nightmare. It's supposed to be. I have my reasons, and for once laziness isn't one of them.

--

This was really only ever written so I would have text to use in the piece it's from. It was never really meant to be a respectable piece of literature. I'm flattered that so many people like it, but I think if you were to take a couple minutes to browse the often neglected literature gallery, you might find something else a hundred times better.

I have an account for my writing, so exposure for the literature community on deviantART is something close to my heart, because so many talented people go unrecognized because they haven't chosen a visual medium. Text can be powerful too. Since this is one of the few places I have a chance to write something that gets noticed, please forgive the mini rant.

Go browse literature!
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knightsky106 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012
again wow this is amazingly good it reminds me of something i wrote but i havent posted it but if your interested in it send me something
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UNWANTEDRAMBLER Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2012
I like this. Not looked at the link, unsure if I should, as I like the abstractness of this. It is surprising what we can come up with by mistake, and this is a great mistake :) Very cool and musta taken time to write/put together.
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LauraTreptow Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ima sent the 1st part of this to my "friend" C______... </3
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UNWANTEDRAMBLER Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2012
Thanks :)
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Summers-Solstice Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2012  Student Artist
:hug:
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bottled-roses Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2011
Wow, I love it c:

Yes, it has grammatical issues and all, but it helps to bring the point across,
and i personally think it makes it better, more realistic.

Again, I think it's really good. I can definitely relate. To ALL of it.
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dyehardredhead Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2010
People like it so much because it's relatable. we all have baggage and we've all had this conversation at some point in our lives. the way you made it non specific was genious (even if it was unintentional) because it allows anyone to slip into the character and relive a moment.
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MissCatie Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2009
wow. this brought me to tears. I've said all of these things at least a thousand times to one of my good friends and I haven't meant it once, but the lies keep on coming. I love how the grammar isn't correct, and some of the words don't make sense, but I love it all. a lot. mostly these parts:
"no. i'm not going to tell you anything - there's nothing to tell."

"i don't need help. i don't want help. nothing's wrong. shut up. i'm not myself? will you just drop it? it's nothing. i'll be fine. i'm just tired. what are you talking about? i'm not making excuses."


wow. I think I might just have to stop now, but I could say thank you a million times for writing this.
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Summers-Solstice Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2009  Student Artist
Thank you for commenting. <3
It's always good to hear that people can relate, and that my attempt to make it as realistic as possible worked.
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MissCatie Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2009
<3
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bookworm-87 Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2009
you've written everything i say when someone asks what's wrong?
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MuseOfMelody Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2009
I don't fave much written work on here (which I am quite ashamed of as I only publish literature...), but this is definitely one of my top 20 pieces, I love it! ^^
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nellie379 Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2009
This is seriously one of the best works i have ever read on deviantart, ever. It's so powerful, raw, and you get in the speaker's head and can feel the conflict they're facing, feel their rushed answers are because of guilt and exasperation and desperation and an inability to come up with better excuses. And you start to think about why they would even need all these excuses, its just an awesome head-space you've created. Great job times infinity!!!!!!!
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Summers-Solstice Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2009  Student Artist
Thank you very much. I guess sometimes shooting from the hip and not editing work out well. I appreciate the comment.
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nellie379 Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2009
:D
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Boxed-Heather Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2009  Student Digital Artist
i do believe i said this to a boyfriend of mine, but there really wasnt anything wrong..
and i later dumped him.
hahah.

but i really love the picture and everything it stands for. its inspiring.
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iwantfangs Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2009
this is amazing it kinda reminds me of how mi life is...
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BDraw Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
That text is so great, I can't find the right words. Without exaggerating, this piece is by far one of the best texts I read so far. And I read alot...

The text really describes the... well, the emotional stages of the narrator very well, at first it's obvious that there's something he/she doesn't want to talk about. Then, one can kind of feel something like a small mental breakdown... Just like you get into a rage when someone hits a really vulnerable nerve. The monoloque sounds really realistic with its short sentences, just like the kind someone uses who tries to fend something off. The continous tries to change the subject, the short try of something like a "counter-attack"... And finally feeling sorry for making the other cry.

This is text really is art. I think if you read this out loud with the right intonation, it'll have a huge impact on the audience. Very good work there. I'm deeply impressed.
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Summers-Solstice Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2008  Student Artist
Sorry for taking so long to get back to you; I haven't been on this account very much lately, but I really appreciate that you took the time to write out such an insightful comment.

Thank you, I'm very flattered. Realism is important to me in my writing (when I'm not writing utter nonsense, that is), and it's always encouraging to hear that I've pulled it off to a degree.

I've briefly considered creating some sort of audio piece with it, but I've never gotten too far with the idea. A couple people have suggested it, so I might. Not really sure yet.
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pinefir Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
hey, i really love the way you put it.

by the way can i copy it? it's for personal purpose, i'll credit you, i might use it in my blog for a drawing or so.

please please please :D
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Summers-Solstice Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2008  Student Artist
Um, send me a note about how exactly you mean to use it and maybe?

I just don't want it to start showing up in random places lol.
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PG-for-Mild-Peril Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2008   Writer
I think that this literature is as good as any literature you can find on dA- that's not a put-down to other writers, but a compliment to you.

I didn't even notice the grammatical errors- not because I'm dense or anything, but because your text is meant to be dialogue, and the grammar is how people talk. Including grammatical errors, the text is perfect- literally, someone's words put to paper.

Many people don't realize just how difficult it is to write realistic dialogue, and it's hard to believe the amount of unrealistic dialogue there is out there. So, in a way, dialogue with grammatical errors is, actually, better written than dialogue without the errors.

(That was confusing...)

I guess what I'm saying is... it's perfect. Metaphorically, there are no grammatical errors, because the way people speak has been perfectly documented here.

I'm pretty sure you know what I'm talking about, and that it's one of the reasons you included the grammatical errors.
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Summers-Solstice Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2008  Student Artist
I do follow you, and I know what you mean. I don't talk with grammar, and I'm pretty sure I've never heard anyone punctuate with a semi-colon. Trying to write properly and make conversation sound realistic is a very contradictory exercise, I guess.

My only problem with this piece as a writer is that I view it as filler. It's just spur of the moment, whatever I thought of, all thrown down at random. Maybe that's what makes it what it is though.
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PG-for-Mild-Peril Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2008   Writer
I think that does make it what it is. Granted, some people do think carefully before they speak, but when someone's worked up like this, they're speaking without thinking. When emotions come into the mix, it's hard to know exactly what you're saying, hard to plan the pronunciation of your next word or the order of words in your sentences. Another reason that this piece is so realistic.
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xJack Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2008
Ha.
It reminds me of me
I'm pretty sure that's not a good thing.
I like it though.
Even with all it's gramatical errors ;]
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KissaTheWolf Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2008   Writer
I love it :D it's very nice
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Darktayle Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2008  Student General Artist
....You said you're not going to say how it ends. Does that mean there's more of it? I'd sorely love to read it if there is. Why? Because even if it is a one sided conversation thing, it displays a certain talent of writing. Even seasoned authors on fanfiction.net mess up big time when they're writing a breakdown of sorts, which is what I see this piece as. They often write characters, who, quite unrealistically blow their top and break down a few paragraphs into the interrogation. In reality, as written by select skilled authors, the subject would put on a happy face and try to ward off the questions. If those questions became insistent, and hitting some sore spots, then the pent-up emotion would eventually break them down, as seen at the end of your piece, where the subject is obviously getting flustered and has lost their composure.

*Glares at above writing* It makes absolutely no sense, but once I get started on an explanation it extends to horrific lengths. Sorry if I've quite ruthlessly taken some of your time hostage and killed it.

Darktayle.
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Summers-Solstice Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2008  Student Artist
Well, there is technically more, but I'd be lying if I said I could reproduce it. The text was written strictly for the original piece, and it never had much editing because the plan was that it wouldn't be readable. However, after Nothing's Wrong was featured, a lot of people were asking about the text, so I posted this much of it.

The rest is lost, because the program I made it in couldn't save layers, and it also couldn't import text, even as copy and paste. So the whole thing was written and then all the layers were compressed as soon as I saved the file. I had a few W.I.P. files that I found, and I could still make out these four layers. I can't really remember how it ends, but it eventually progresses to the point where the interrogator is driven away and the narrator does have a breakdown.

Thank you very much for the compliment. I'm kind of inspired to write an interrogation now... I have some writing posted here: [link] , but it's rather different than this piece...

Don't worry it all made sense, thanks for taking the time to write such a detailed comment. (I think my reply may be a bit overly long.)
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Darktayle Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2008  Student General Artist
Yeah, the program I use doesn't save layers either. It's rather irritating, especially when it means you generally have to try and finish a very complicated picture in one sitting. My computer often goes a bit haywire with the 'automatic updates'. It's extremely frustrating to open the laptop to find it's gone and restarted, losing a damn lot of data.

No worries ^^. If you notice something impressive, it's only natural to compliment it. As for 'taking the time', I'm running out of things to do. There are only so many times you can read a favorite story, after all. I'm thankful for anything that compells me to consume time. And long replies are quite welcome with me.

-Darktayle
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Darktayle Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2008  Student General Artist
I seem to be getting the feeling of intense heartbreak from this piece. Like, someone that has affections for someone. Unrequited ones. And they're brooding and angsting over it far too much for it to be healthy. And now, the object of said affections is interrogating them over their behavior.

Or am I just overanalysing? Even if I am, I like the aforemention feeling I get from it, so I'll be faving both this and the non-translated piece.

Darktayle.
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Summers-Solstice Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2008  Student Artist
You're not that too far off the mark, really. There are some elements of unrequited affection, and yes, the interrogator is someone they feel strongly for. When I wrote it, I just sort of started and drew from personal experience. Some of the responses are my own defenses, a fair bit is inspired from one day at lunch when I was sitting across the table from a friend who insisted she was fine, but was really far from it.

I'm glad you enjoyed reading it.
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Darktayle Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2008  Student General Artist
*Sigh* What's life without difficulties, right? I didn't mean to pry o.0

Well, at least my perceptive abilities haven't completely crapped off and died somewhere. I write a fair amount of angsty romancy oneshots, so I'd be rather pertubed if I couldn't catch some hints here and there. I like to think I have a relatively good understanding of the human mind....well, most of them, anyway. Any psychologist that's landed with me might as well pray to whatever God out there that I don't drive them insane. Mwahaha.

One of my self-made 'sayings' comes to mind. 'Quite often, the art is a window to the artist'. Meaning quite simply that you can usually learn quite a lot about the artist by investigating the overall 'tone' of their works. Mine tend to be quiet, dark, angsty, melancholic, or something of the sort. I dab a little in poetry myself....though I rarely post it. Most of it's posted on my sub-account, Oceanwind499. I published a dark, surreal-sort poem yesterday. It swears a lot. ^^

Apologising for the overly long text again,
-Darktayle.
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Summers-Solstice Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2008  Student Artist
Blehh, so sorry. I meant to reply to you quite a while ago.

I agree with your quote. I think any piece of art tells something about the artist, because the creation of art has to be such a personal thing. You can sense someone's mood, values, or sometimes just their idea of aesthetic, but it does tell you something about them.
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HayliLiz Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2008
W-wow. This is kinda scary - this actually IS the conversation I've been having a lot with a close friend recently. Especially the middleish bit of the first section. Some things are just too hard to say. ^^; Anyway, nicely insightful piece!
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lovemyfriends Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2008
I really really like this!
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elegentmess Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2008
It's like someone followed me around and wrote down the things I've said in the past few years... Kinda sad actually
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Paulgswanson Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2008
Nice one guy. lol It does seem a little one sided though (thats a joke) ;) I think i'll ad das uber art pic to meh favs. Check my writing if you gets time. Not sure if you'll like it though :3 anywayz- Eagle 5 out!
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brondraw Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2008
This is perfect it captures the emotion and scenario perfectly. I've had a friend do this to me before and I honestly think no other words could have described the situation better.. it's perfect
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bleedingheart415 Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2008
just amazing. i know how it feels. i can feel the emotions in my bones. i actually cried, now thats the mark of something with meaning
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Heartmaker Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
I like this better than the original file. It's somewhat disturbing and at the same time so true. A great concept.
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coldheart7 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2008
both the picture and the text script are very good and interesting
now im curious as to what the reast says
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BetwixtWorlds Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2008
I can identify with this. I've been telling that lie for so long... And now I really want to quite lying but...People always hate it when shy people try to come out of their shell. Ah, well. Maybe things will improve once I graduate from high school. *shrug* Lovely work. *circle of applause* ^.^
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sensesfailgodsmack Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2008
i had a conversation almost exactly like this. i love how it pertains to real life.
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Wings-of-Xin Featured By Owner May 25, 2008
Wow... This touches me really deeply... I would favorite it, I really would, but right now I'm depressed, and my friends know that. But I keep telling them that I'm okay, so if they see this, they'll worry... I'm sorry. But I really really really really do love this....
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Summers-Solstice Featured By Owner May 26, 2008  Student Artist
Thank you. I appreciate the comment much more, really--it's easier to click buttons than actually type anything.

I really hope you start feeling better soon. <3
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Wings-of-Xin Featured By Owner May 26, 2008
Thank you ^-^

It\'ll be hard, but, people believe in me. So, I\'ll have to get better ^-^
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larry099 Featured By Owner May 23, 2008
i find myself doing that kind of thing to people as well and then i get really mad at them thinking that they didn't care, and yet it was my fault in the first place for pushing them away








:cookie: why is there a random cookie here?
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Blacksilver9 Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2008
happens all the time
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ShaniceXRawrr Featured By Owner May 16, 2008
this completely happened to me yesterday, my friends never believe me when i say i'm okay, lol. usually because i'm never quiet without a reason, i'm usually far too hyper x]]
but yehh, in the end i got tired of making the same old excuses i've made a thousand times and i just listened to my music. =]
but yehh, i can really relate to it.
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Nini-minou Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2008
you have no idea how much i enjoyed to read that. i think i could read it a lot more times without being tired of it.
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